Comments on: What May Be Brought You, As One Dying; What My Father Left (Me); Dear Melody

By: Rachel Swirsky

Rachel Swirsky — Wed, 04 Aug 2010 21:09:49 +0000

Thanks for providing a forum for this, Dr. Charles!

Jordan, the first three lines of your poem are a powerful hook.

Ruth, I love the layered material details in “What May Be Brought You,” particularly presented as crisp moments from a perspective that’s foggy and diffuse. The last four stanzas are especially striking.

By: Ruth F. Harrison

Ruth F. Harrison — Mon, 02 Aug 2010 21:32:49 +0000

Thank you. I’m glad the poem speaks to someone besides family members who shared that period. I think “What My Father Left (Me)” by Jordan Grumet is fine, a strong poem. And Rachel, I like your poem well, especially the conclusion, which is right and true and simple. Good work! Kudos to you both.
Ruth

By: Mical

Mical — Mon, 02 Aug 2010 01:07:53 +0000

Lovely poems, thank you authors.

By: Jondean

Jondean — Sun, 01 Aug 2010 18:26:36 +0000

Ruth, yours is absolutely wonderful! They’re all wonderful, actually. I’m so honored to be able to read these. 🙂

By: barry

barry — Sun, 01 Aug 2010 09:27:28 +0000

this poem is superb-well done

By: drcharles

drcharles — Sun, 01 Aug 2010 05:56:08 +0000

Thank you to the poets who permitted these entries to be shared : )